Tears in the Snow
My body too skinny
My throat too dry
You said be brave
I don't know how much longer
I can try
Bodies lay dead
No one cares
Feet are bleeding
Walk on or be gone
We march
Faster faster
Along the dirt road
Nothing remains but
Tears in the snow
Soup and bread
That's all that we get
A teaspoon of water
Will soon disappear
But will then return
With all of our
Tears
Times running out
Save us
Please
you promised
Hi Sam! I really loved reading your poem! Everything fits together perfectly and it all flows really well. The one part that caught me off guard was the ending. It was such a loud statement, that it stood out from everything else to a point where it just sticks with you. I felt as though whoever you intended to be narrating this was begging to be saved. To be taken away from what they were forced into. This was an amazing poem! Great work!
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ReplyDeleteI thought that your post was amazing!! You poured lots of emotion into this blog post. Also I thought it was very cool how you made most of your poem rhymed.